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Here’s to trying something new! I am participating in a critique blog hop. Every Sunday I will be adding 250 words of whatever work in progress I feel like I need help with at the time – don’t expect it to always be perfectly edited when it gets posted 🙂
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- Use the Oreo Cookie method. Good-Bad-Good. You can say something nice about anything. There is no reason to be blatantly obnoxious.)
So here it goes. This is a contemporary romance novella. I need some help with integrateing in the male characters thoughts, so I am starting you off with the first 250 words to help me further in the story. For now call it One In a Million.
Angela turned her face away from the wind. The snow, which had been falling gently before her current disaster of a date, had turned into a blizzard when she had finally walked out. Now she was left standing outside the restaurant, praying that she didn’t freeze before her best friend, Rebecca, got there. Her skinny jeans and trendy flats left her ankles exposed, and Angela did her best flamingo imitation as she alternated lifting one frozen foot, then the other from the snow, trying to stave off frostbite. Shivering, she switched from frozen foot to frozen foot; playing executioner to each of her frost-bitten toes.
The night had been a learning experience to say the least. Nothing new, but her taste in men was as bad as ever. First Brian had attempted to find out what kind of underwear she was wearing. Then he had flat-out refused to drive her home in the snow. It really was too bad about the flaming hot fajitas. They had looked better on Brian’s plate than in his lap.
Attending the company’s New Year party with her boss’ nephew no longer looked like the worst idea in the world. Sure, the guy reeked of cigarettes and dressed like a refugee from the 1980s, but going with him would earn her points with her boss. Besides, she wasn’t exactly doing a great job finding someone herself. The set up’s needed to stop though, no matter how good intentioned her coworkers were.
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