Here’s to trying something new! I am participating in a critique blog hop. Every Sunday I will be adding 250 words of whatever work in progress I feel like I need help with at the time – don’t expect it to always be perfectly edited when it gets posted 🙂 This is a good time to give feedback. I believe others are on their 8th post – click below to see other participants.
(If you would like to leave a critique use Jennifer’s method:
- Use the Oreo Cookie method. Good-Bad-Good. You can say something nice about anything. There is no reason to be blatantly obnoxious.)
So here it goes. This is a contemporary romance. It has no title at the moment. See what you think about the first 250 words!
Marci Adam’s was gripping the steering wheel too tight. Her breathing was coming out a little quicker then appropriate for someone who just made a conscious life change. Her forehead was pressed against the cold, hard, black plastic of the same steering wheel that she was clinging to as if her life depended on it.
“What did I just do?” No one was going to answer her except for her dog, the dog that had eaten her last chip somewhere between the Maine border and her old life. Heavy panting and the thwap, thwap of Stella’s tail was starting to wear on Marci’s last nerve.
“Stella, stop. Please. I beg you.” She slowly turned her head to glance at the always perky black lab. “When are you not loving life? Seriously? Spill your secret to life. Right now I could really use it.”
The fact that Marci had just spent most of her savings on a bed and breakfast, that she had purchased at midnight on Craigslist, was starting to sit like a rock in her stomach. Too bad the feeling was three days too late for her to run. Taking a deep breath she stared at the odometer. It might as well have read a million miles. There was no turning around. She hadn’t driven a hundreds of miles from Colorado to Maine just to turn around and give up. She wasn’t admitting defeat and turning back into the arms of the fiancé she’d just left behind.
In this hop, participants post 250 words of their work in progress to be critiqued. Then everyone hops around to critique others. Don’t have a post of your own? We’d love a critique anyway! And next time you can sign up yourself (see below)
Click on over to these great writers to check out and critique what they’ve posted!
*You may not copy or reproduce this post or any of it’s contents without permission from the author. This work is the original work of Michelle Ziegler.